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« on: July 07, 2003, 10:02:22 am » |
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Can you please help me to put this in more elegant phrases:
Attached you receive the approved application including all its attachments. You can now proceed to install the new system keeping to the budget planned for your plant. The details about the planned budgets you will find in the attachements to the application.
Thank you - Kohinoor
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Jackie G
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« Reply #1 on: July 07, 2003, 10:05:52 am » |
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Ok, here goes: Enclosed is your application which has now been approved. Installation of the new system can now proceed, while keeping within the budget constraints for your plant. All budget information is contained in the application's attachments. Jackie www.iqps.org
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kohinoor
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« Reply #2 on: July 07, 2003, 10:10:01 am » |
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Thank you so much. This was really fast and sounds so much nicer than what I wrote. Seems I need a lot more exercise to improve my english.
Kohinoor
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elkiedee
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« Reply #3 on: July 07, 2003, 11:27:11 am » |
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Is the software program and information included with it intended to help with accountancy/book keeping/budgeting for the factories/plants? I wouldn't want to make a suggestion based on a misunderstanding of what you intend to say.
Plant is US English I think, factory is UK English - I'm sure you know which will be better understood by the recipients of this letter.
Luci
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Jackie G
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« Reply #4 on: July 07, 2003, 12:07:01 pm » |
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I think plant is fairly universally understood in the Uk as factory or more properly, an entire 'site' Jackie www.iqps.org
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kohinoor
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« Reply #5 on: July 07, 2003, 12:16:00 pm » |
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It is not a software. It is a new video conference system. And our plants / factories / sales offices are all over the world, Europe (including UK), North- and South America, Asia, Africa, Australia. So I am not sure which to choose plant or factory. And this letter is going to the "big bosses" of each plant / factory, that's why I would like to have it in "good english" not just my attempts of a translation .
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Jackie G
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« Reply #6 on: July 07, 2003, 01:47:42 pm » |
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Kohinoor go with plant - it's universally understood Jackie www.iqps.org
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andream
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« Reply #7 on: July 11, 2003, 10:00:09 am » |
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Kohinoor You can practice your english with us anytime you want  Andrea |
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kohinoor
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« Reply #8 on: July 14, 2003, 02:40:05 pm » |
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Thank you, I will. Whenever I get the chance to take a look in here. Which is not as often as I would like to.
Kohinoor
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andream
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« Reply #9 on: July 14, 2003, 08:40:07 pm » |
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And actually I'd use "Facility" Im sure too late to do you any good Andrea |
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kohinoor
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Well it is to late for this letter, but I am sure there are more to come.
But I think I will have difficulty to remember and use the word facility in this context because somehow (I don't know why) in my mind it links with the word toilet.
Kohinoor
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Kohinoor,
You are probably linking the words because sometimes - in an attempt to be delicate - people don't want to use the words "rest room", "bathroom" or "toilet" and they might say, "I need to use the facilities."
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